03 Writing topics IELTS Task 1 Academic mức điểm 6.0 – 7.0 (Kỳ 3)

Task:

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows annual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in Somecountry. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

Student’s sample work:

The bargraph describes the water usage for every year in Somecountry in millions of cubic meters.

The water usage are shown in two trends , ground water and public supply. Fuel and textiles are the ones that uses the least water, 10 of public supply and 70 and 80 of ground water. Machinery are just the opposite of these two and has 10 of ground water and 100 of public supply.

Food/drinks, metal, paper and chemicals are all over 100 of ground water where chemicals peaks at dramaticlly 430. The highest number of water usage of public supplies also belongs to chemicals (240). Next on the list is food/drinks with 190, the others are under 100.

Overall, the chemical industry uses a lot more water then the rest of the industries both ground water and public supplies, and in general most industries use ground water by far more then public supplies.

A teacher’s comment

This is a good report, the trends are correctly noticed. Suggested improvements: use units in addition to numbers (10 of what? Millions of cubic meters). Use more connective words to smoothly move from one paragraph to another. Pay attention to grammar, REFER TO YOUR CLASS TEACHER for suggested corrections. 

Sample 2:   LINE GRAPH AT APPROX. 7.0 IELTS SCORE

Task:

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below gives information on wages of Somecountry over a ten-year period. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

Student’s sample work:

The linegraph describes the growth of wages in Somecountry from year 1993 to year 2003.

The growth starts at two percent in 1993, but it doesn’t stay there very long before it rapidly doubles in 1994. Further on, the percentages declines to three percent in 1995, stays steady for year, before it start to rise slowly and ends up just under four percent in 1997. 1998 is the best year where the wages peaked at six percent.

However, after 1998 the wages declines nearly every year. Only a year after , the percentage drops to well under three percent, stays there on roughly three percent till 2000. In 2002 the wages reach the lowest point of just one percent growth. Luckily the growth rises in 2003 at junst under two percent.

Overall, the growth rate in wages in Somecountry has shown striking changes through the ten years.

A teacher’s comment:

This is a good report. It covers the task, divided correctly into paragraphs and the vocabulary is just right. Problems: it has less than 150 words (146) and there are some grammatical errors. Assuming the corrections were made, looks like Band 7. 

Sample 3:   TABLE REPORT AT APPROXIMATELY 6.0 IELTS SCORE

Task:

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.

The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry in 1999-2004. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

Student’s sample work:

This table shows homeschooled students in Somecountry in year 1999-2004 in percenages.

The main trend is that all grades including kindergarten is growing for every year. Kindergarten started highest at 2.4 and ended highest at 2.9 percent with a constant increase. But grades 1-2 and grades 5-6 shows a little different trend, both starts at 1,5 percent in 1999 and declines a little bit in 2000. Both of them increased slowly in 2002 and both it holds that course to 2004 where grades 1-2 ends at 2,1 percent and grades 5-6 ends at 2.6 percent.

Grades 3-4 has a slow but steady growth througt all six years. It starts at 1.6 percent in 1999 and increases 0.1 every year except in 2003 when it peaks up 0.2 percent. Grades 7-8 starts at 1.6 percent and stays there for three years until it rapidly rises up to 2.2 and peaks at 2.5 in 2004.

Overall, all grades including kindergarten has had a rise at rougly minimum 1 percent and more in 6 years.

A teacher’s comment:

This is a good report; here is how you can make it better: the coherence needs improvement, meaning the logical connection between sentences inside a paragraph and between paragraphs. Use more connective words (Furthermore, However, etc).

The groupings you’ve done are fine, but try to use more variations describing those statistics: use words such as numbers, figures, percentages, etc. The grammar and the spelling need some extra attention.

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